This tells the tale of a model desperate for attention, and the man whose heart she broke.
Anyway, I'm doing my level best to keep my crazy little revenge-fantasy captions small enough to actually be legible. I think I'm getting better at it, bit by bit.
And I'm also thinking I need to have a proper logo, not just "by B-Rex" after the title
Also, I'm thinking I might need to work on the blog layout a bit. Maybe create a proper header image.
Hmm.
Cruel and extreme, but it doesn't push my buttons as well as you usually do. But I expect that's just me, and there is someone else who wills say, "Finally he got it right!"
ReplyDeleteHmm...I wonder what it's lacking? It's got forced piercing, bondage, public humiliation, revenge, and more. I wonder if the extreme nature of the picture itself is the problem....
DeleteI agree though, it does fall a little flat. Maybe I should have devoted more text to the model/artist relationship in the first two paragraphs. It takes a bit of character development to make a revenge cap work properly; this may not have enough to really connect the reader to the story.
Thanks for the feedback!
Actually, what didn't work for me was the pic itself -- a little too weird, or the wrong kind of weird. These things are subtle and delicate, like an erection.
DeleteAs for your logo, I have found a couple of rather poor possibilities during a web search, and will e-mail them to you. They might, at least, inspire a genuinely good logo design.
ReplyDeleteWould definitely appreciate them, thanks!
DeleteWow!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this one. It's a really hot premise and the picture was as close as you're going to get to a visual depiction of it.
ReplyDeleteAlthough, it does give me an idea for a pic I've had loitering around my hard drive...